so-soDespite some inconsistencies and things that plain pissed me off, this was a really entertaining read. Some of the world-building and secondary characters were magnificent and I really wish we had more focus on them. Plus, "Add It Up" by The Violent Femmes as a spell component was just plain cool.
...does "made out" have a different meaning in WV? A couple pages later, she rejects his attempted kiss again, citing the same reason. Are they having sex? Are they in fact making out in the way I know how i.e. intense kissing? Or is "made out" being used in totally different connotations?
Magdalena is described as being olive skinned when she is introduced. Now "porcelain" and "alabaster" are descriptors being used about her skin. I'm also olive skinned and under no circumstances does my skin ever look porcelain. None. So the author needs to figure out what skin tone she actually is.
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